• postpoetry / gjd

    From George J. Dance@21:1/5 to All on Wed Oct 19 09:48:05 2022
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    postpoetry


    although there's nothing left to say
    we're gonna say it anyway
    & if a reader doesn't read
    we'll call him something we don't need
    & if a critic calls it shit
    we won't believe a word of it
    & if a poet points that out
    we'll just ignore it & we'll shout
    about her frogs and trees and birds
    so we won't have to read her words

    or better yet let's write of war
    and fill a page or two with gore
    some reeking flesh a severed head
    & maggots feasting on the dead
    & if perchance that doesn't shock
    let's add a line of fuck ass cock
    motherfucker piss & shit
    (who knows that just might pass for wit)

    what else to do what else to say
    when everything is mere cliche?
    how else to make a reader feel
    or think that what we say is real?
    of course the whole idea is dumb
    when we're as comfortably numb
    but if we sweat through every motion
    we may feel a real emotion –
    at least it kills an hour or two
    and we have nothing else to do.

    ~~
    George J. Dance, 2007
    from Doggerel, and other doggerel, 2015

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  • From W.Dockery@21:1/5 to George J. Dance on Thu Oct 20 13:24:46 2022
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    George J. Dance wrote:

    On 2022-10-19 3:35 p.m., Zod Zodly wrote:
    On Wednesday, October 19, 2022 at 9:48:09 AM UTC-4, george...@yahoo.ca wrote:

    postpoetry


    although there's nothing left to say
    we're gonna say it anyway
    & if a reader doesn't read
    we'll call him something we don't need
    & if a critic calls it shit
    we won't believe a word of it
    & if a poet points that out
    we'll just ignore it & we'll shout
    about her frogs and trees and birds
    so we won't have to read her words

    or better yet let's write of war
    and fill a page or two with gore
    some reeking flesh a severed head
    & maggots feasting on the dead
    & if perchance that doesn't shock
    let's add a line of fuck ass cock
    motherfucker piss & shit
    (who knows that just might pass for wit)

    what else to do what else to say
    when everything is mere cliche?
    how else to make a reader feel
    or think that what we say is real?
    of course the whole idea is dumb
    when we're as comfortably numb
    but if we sweat through every motion
    we may feel a real emotion –
    at least it kills an hour or two
    and we have nothing else to do.

    ~~
    George J. Dance, 2007
    from Doggerel, and other doggerel, 2015

    Quite an interesting poem, G.D.


    Thanks, Zod. It's good to see some people still reading poetry here.

    I'm reading the poetry but I also see that Senetto is obsessively creating Will Dockery troll threads, most of which I don't respond to.

    In one of these you're correcting his lies and setting the record straight, I appreciate that.

    You might remind Senetto that I don't usually post personal and private information about my friends and family here.

    Thanks again, and have a good day.

    πŸ™‚

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  • From George J. Dance@21:1/5 to W.Dockery on Thu Oct 20 10:26:41 2022
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    On 2022-10-20 9:24 a.m., W.Dockery wrote:
    George J. Dance wrote:

    On 2022-10-19 3:35 p.m., Zod Zodly wrote:
    On Wednesday, October 19, 2022 at 9:48:09 AM UTC-4,
    george...@yahoo.ca wrote:

    postpoetry


    although there's nothing left to say
    we're gonna say it anyway
    & if a reader doesn't read
    we'll call him something we don't need
    & if a critic calls it shit
    we won't believe a word of it
    & if a poet points that out
    we'll just ignore it & we'll shout
    about her frogs and trees and birds
    so we won't have to read her words

    or better yet let's write of war
    and fill a page or two with gore
    some reeking flesh a severed head
    & maggots feasting on the dead
    & if perchance that doesn't shock
    let's add a line of fuck ass cock
    motherfucker piss & shit
    (who knows that just might pass for wit)

    what else to do what else to say
    when everything is mere cliche?
    how else to make a reader feel
    or think that what we say is real?
    of course the whole idea is dumb
    when we're as comfortably numb
    but if we sweat through every motion
    we may feel a real emotion –
    at least it kills an hour or two
    and we have nothing else to do.

    ~~
    George J. Dance, 2007
    from Doggerel, and other doggerel, 2015

    Quite an interesting poem, G.D.


    Thanks, Zod. It's good to see some people still reading poetry here.

    I'm reading the poetry but I also see that Senetto is obsessively
    creating Will Dockery troll threads, most of which I don't respond to.

    In one of these you're correcting his lies and setting the record
    straight, I appreciate that.


    I also wanted to set the record straight on his "Nelly Black" thread,
    reminding him that it was Michael Monkey Pendragon who equated your
    music with the Beatles (with Ms Black's on a lower level). But I haven't
    found the thread to cite. Perhaps you or Zod could find it for me?


    You might remind Senetto that I don't usually post personal and private information about my friends and family here.


    I think it may come up. It does explain why he's post(edit)ing your
    20-year-old conversations from rec.arts.poems.


    Thanks again, and have a good day.

    πŸ™‚

    Thank you, Will; same to you.

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  • From W.Dockery@21:1/5 to george...@yahoo.ca on Thu Oct 20 14:54:07 2022
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    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 10:38:16 AM UTC-4, george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    On 2022-10-20 9:47 a.m., jdcha...@gmail.com wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 8:43:53 AM UTC-4, blackpo...@aol.com wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 8:34:08 AM UTC-4, george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    On 2022-10-20 8:28 a.m., Edward Rochester Esq. wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 8:02:28 AM UTC-4, george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    On 2022-10-19 8:50 p.m., Edward Rochester Esq. wrote:

    On Saturday, December 28, 2002 at 4:12:42 PM UTC-5, opb...@yahoo.com >>>>> wrote:> and you know… that over the years, I HAVE

    <Troll snipped>

    Why are you post-editing 20-year old conversations from rec.arts.poems, >>>>> Chimp?


    Will Dockery...16 years ago

    "I consider myself, above all else, an entertainer, and many people do dig a
    kick-ass folk-rock performance.

    Musicians see what I'm all about and want a piece of that action, and I'm a
    free agent to bring my "special guest star" to anyone who calls my name, to
    climb onstage and reach into my bag of tricks.

    It's a great, bumpy and wild ride being Will Dockery, and I wouldn't trade
    it for all the world's gold."

    He sounds like someone happy with his life. No wonder you envy and
    resent him so.
    Nothing better

    <Malicious lies and misrepresentations from Jim Senetto snipped>

    There is nothing else to know about Will Dockery.

    As if you'd ever stop obsessing over me, Senetto?

    actually, there's plenty of other explanations that are possible... perhaps he was grieving and was too sad and distressed to share the info here... or perhaps he felt that the info was too personal and wouldn't be recieved with sympathy and support
    in a group that is quite often toxic and malicious and nasty and mean spirited and hateful...
    Thank you, Jordy; those are all good hypotheses. But I'm afraid you left
    out the most obvious one:

    He didn't want ace reporter "Edward Rochester" post-editing his comments
    and putting them in a trollthread.

    Well put, George.

    (Moved from the troll thread.)

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  • From General-Zod@21:1/5 to Ash Wurthing on Fri Oct 28 20:55:29 2022
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    On Friday, October 28, 2022 at 4:29:25 PM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
    On Friday, October 28, 2022 at 1:13:42 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    Ash Wurthing wrote:

    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:54:23 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    Michael Pendragon wrote:

    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:13:31 AM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:

    "We know that The Beatles and myself rest on the "Decent" level.

    Nelly Black is at least one level lower than The Beatles and me"
    Good to see ace reporter "Edward Rochester Esq." is back, with another
    fake story for NGBS.

    In fact, it was MMP who placed Will and the Beatles on the same level,
    with Nelly Black lower down. He confirmed that.

    <quote>
    On 2022-10-20 11:59 a.m., Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 11:25:13 AM UTC-4,
    george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    Since you're here, Michael: do you remember the thread where you
    favorably compared Will's music to the Beatles"?

    No. I remember placing it on a level with that of the Beatles.

    I.e., While I don't particularly care for either of their records, I
    don't find their music offensive (to my eardrums, not my moral
    sensibilities).
    </quote>

    MMP's entitled to his opinion. Some people don't like the Beatles; hell,
    some don't even like the Bells! There's no accounting for taste.

    What isn't fine is your pretending Will had made that comment, when he
    was just repeating MMP's statement. You're lying, just for fun. I think
    you should stop, for your own good.

    Think about it: When you tell lies about Will that everyone knows are
    lies, how do you expect any of them to believe you when they don't know?
    Why should they take the word of a habitual liar?

    Of course never mind the clueless ignorance Pen shows when he declares the BEATLES to be merely "decent"...

    And no offense to Doc, I'm sure he is aware of the humor in such an absurd judgement from Pen..


    No offense taken, Zod, Pendragon put me on the level of The Beatles, I'd never considered myself a peer of four of the most talented artists of all time.

    Hilariously, Pen puts Tiny TIM and PAT Boone at the top level, way above the BEATLES....!!

    Pendragon also thinks he's a better poet than T.S. Eliot, so he obviously sees things differently than "most people".
    Pat Boone and Tiny Tim as on a far lower level than the BEATLES, as most people know...

    Pat Boone was the second highest charting singer of the early r'n'r era (the late 50s). He was also the first white solo artist to chard with a r'n'r song (6 months before Elvis)
    Pat Boone was knocked off the charts permanently by the ty The Beatles arrived.
    The Beatles - Hey Jude
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A_MjCqQoLLA

    A really putrid song.
    That's Pat Boone's genre.

    "Putrid" isn't a genre
    It is for Pat Boone's sappy sounds.


    sWilly why
    Ash, why do you lie and misrepresent so much?
    First off is

    First off is that you are a troll, Ash... we have known that for about a year, now..!

    Ha ha.

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  • From W.Dockery@21:1/5 to General-Zod on Sat Oct 29 03:18:48 2022
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    General-Zod wrote:

    On Friday, October 28, 2022 at 4:29:25 PM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
    On Friday, October 28, 2022 at 1:13:42 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    Ash Wurthing wrote:

    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:54:23 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote: >> > >> Michael Pendragon wrote:

    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:13:31 AM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:

    "We know that The Beatles and myself rest on the "Decent" level.

    Nelly Black is at least one level lower than The Beatles and me"
    Good to see ace reporter "Edward Rochester Esq." is back, with another
    fake story for NGBS.

    In fact, it was MMP who placed Will and the Beatles on the same level,
    with Nelly Black lower down. He confirmed that.

    <quote>
    On 2022-10-20 11:59 a.m., Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 11:25:13 AM UTC-4,
    george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    Since you're here, Michael: do you remember the thread where you
    favorably compared Will's music to the Beatles"?

    No. I remember placing it on a level with that of the Beatles.

    I.e., While I don't particularly care for either of their records, I
    don't find their music offensive (to my eardrums, not my moral
    sensibilities).
    </quote>

    MMP's entitled to his opinion. Some people don't like the Beatles; hell,
    some don't even like the Bells! There's no accounting for taste.

    What isn't fine is your pretending Will had made that comment, when he
    was just repeating MMP's statement. You're lying, just for fun. I think
    you should stop, for your own good.

    Think about it: When you tell lies about Will that everyone knows are
    lies, how do you expect any of them to believe you when they don't know?
    Why should they take the word of a habitual liar?

    Of course never mind the clueless ignorance Pen shows when he declares the BEATLES to be merely "decent"...

    And no offense to Doc, I'm sure he is aware of the humor in such an absurd judgement from Pen..


    No offense taken, Zod, Pendragon put me on the level of The Beatles, I'd never considered myself a peer of four of the most talented artists of all time.

    Hilariously, Pen puts Tiny TIM and PAT Boone at the top level, way above the BEATLES....!!

    Pendragon also thinks he's a better poet than T.S. Eliot, so he obviously sees things differently than "most people".
    Pat Boone and Tiny Tim as on a far lower level than the BEATLES, as most people know...

    Pat Boone was the second highest charting singer of the early r'n'r era (the late 50s). He was also the first white solo artist to chard with a r'n'r song (6 months before Elvis)
    Pat Boone was knocked off the charts permanently by the ty The Beatles arrived.
    The Beatles - Hey Jude
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A_MjCqQoLLA

    A really putrid song.
    That's Pat Boone's genre.

    "Putrid" isn't a genre
    It is for Pat Boone's sappy sounds.


    sWilly why
    Ash, why do you lie and misrepresent so much?
    First off is

    First off is that you are a troll, Ash... we have known that for about a year, now..!

    Ha ha.


    You nailed it, Zod.

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  • From General-Zod@21:1/5 to Will Dockery on Sat Oct 29 19:44:56 2022
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    Will Dockery wrote:
    Zod wrote:
    Ash wrote:
    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:54:23 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote: >>> > >> Michael Pendragon wrote:

    On Thursday, October 27, 2022 at 1:13:31 AM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:

    "We know that The Beatles and myself rest on the "Decent" level.

    Nelly Black is at least one level lower than The Beatles and me"
    Good to see ace reporter "Edward Rochester Esq." is back, with another
    fake story for NGBS.

    In fact, it was MMP who placed Will and the Beatles on the same level,
    with Nelly Black lower down. He confirmed that.

    <quote>
    On 2022-10-20 11:59 a.m., Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Thursday, October 20, 2022 at 11:25:13 AM UTC-4,
    george...@yahoo.ca wrote:
    Since you're here, Michael: do you remember the thread where you
    favorably compared Will's music to the Beatles"?

    No. I remember placing it on a level with that of the Beatles.

    I.e., While I don't particularly care for either of their records, I
    don't find their music offensive (to my eardrums, not my moral
    sensibilities).
    </quote>

    MMP's entitled to his opinion. Some people don't like the Beatles; hell,
    some don't even like the Bells! There's no accounting for taste.

    What isn't fine is your pretending Will had made that comment, when he
    was just repeating MMP's statement. You're lying, just for fun. I think
    you should stop, for your own good.

    Think about it: When you tell lies about Will that everyone knows are
    lies, how do you expect any of them to believe you when they don't know?
    Why should they take the word of a habitual liar?

    Of course never mind the clueless ignorance Pen shows when he declares the BEATLES to be merely "decent"...

    And no offense to Doc, I'm sure he is aware of the humor in such an absurd judgement from Pen..


    No offense taken, Zod, Pendragon put me on the level of The Beatles, I'd never considered myself a peer of four of the most talented artists of all time.

    Hilariously, Pen puts Tiny TIM and PAT Boone at the top level, way above the BEATLES....!!

    Pendragon also thinks he's a better poet than T.S. Eliot, so he obviously sees things differently than "most people".
    Pat Boone and Tiny Tim as on a far lower level than the BEATLES, as most people know...

    Pat Boone was the second highest charting singer of the early r'n'r era (the late 50s). He was also the first white solo artist to chard with a r'n'r song (6 months before Elvis)
    Pat Boone was knocked off the charts permanently by the ty The Beatles arrived.
    The Beatles - Hey Jude
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A_MjCqQoLLA

    A really putrid song.
    That's Pat Boone's genre.

    "Putrid" isn't a genre
    It is for Pat Boone's sappy sounds.


    sWilly why
    Ash, why do you lie and misrepresent so much?
    First off is

    First off is that you are a troll, Ash... we have known that for about a year, now..!

    Ha ha.


    You nailed it, Zod.

    That about covers it... ha ha.

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  • From W-Dockery@21:1/5 to michaelmalef...@gmail.com on Tue Nov 1 17:16:07 2022
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    On Tuesday, November 1, 2022 at 12:41:48 PM UTC-4, michaelmalef...@gmail.com wrote:
    On Tuesday, November 1, 2022 at 12:37:56 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    On Tuesday, November 1, 2022 at 12:32:36 PM UTC-4, michaelmalef...@gmail.com wrote:
    On Tuesday, November 1, 2022 at 12:28:25 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 9:09:53 PM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
    Will Dockery wrote:

    On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 2:15:23 PM UTC-4, michaelmalef...@gmail.com wrote:
    On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 2:11:38 PM UTC-4, Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 12:59:44 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    On Saturday, October 22, 2022 at 5:51:34 AM UTC, george....@yahoo.ca wrote:

    postpoetry


    although there's nothing left to say
    we're gonna say it anyway
    & if a reader doesn't read
    we'll call him something we don't need
    & if a critic calls it shit
    we won't believe a word of it
    & if a poet points that out
    we'll just ignore it & we'll shout
    about her frogs and trees and birds
    so we won't have to read her words

    or better yet let's write of war
    and fill a page or two with gore
    some reeking flesh a severed head
    & maggots feasting on the dead
    & if perchance that doesn't shock
    let's add a line of fuck ass cock
    motherfucker piss & shit
    (who knows that just might pass for wit)

    what else to do what else to say
    when everything is mere cliche?
    how else to make a reader feel
    or think that what we say is real?
    of course the whole idea is dumb
    when we're as comfortably numb
    but if we sweat through every motion
    we may feel a real emotion –
    at least it kills an hour or two
    and we have nothing else to do.

    ~~
    George J. Dance, 2007
    from Doggerel, and other doggerel, 2015

    George Dance don't need no stinkin' commas.
    It isn't about what George Dance needs, "Professor"; it's about what the
    speaker of the poem needs.

    The speaker in your poem is not "a muse."
    I never said he was. Where did you get the idea the speaker might be a
    muse?
    If poetry is meant to be read aloud, how does your lack of punctuation help your poem?
    Use the line and stanza breaks. That's what they're there for.
    You did not address the visual demand for six ampersands..
    It's just part of the style. "and" is replaced by &.
    Does the speaker say "ampersand" in each line?
    No, "Professor,", an ampersand is pronounced "and." I can understand you
    not knowing that, but it's something you could have Googled.
    Let me quote (from memory) from Karla, another wannabe online poetry
    teacher we once had here:

    "Do not confuse the speaker of the poem with the writer of the poem.."
    That saying has been used too much here.
    Not enough, considering how many tend to forget it so often.
    The poem still represents your attempt at creativity.
    Oh, good; you haven't started calling it "plagiarized" yet..
    Should she have?

    That would be a typical NancyGene troll stunt, yes.

    I didn't ask if she would have (in your paranoid opinion), but *should* she have.

    George Dance is known (with or without justification) for


    That's just a smear from PJR, Pen, you know that....
    Pendragon damned well knows it.
    That only accounts for one of the accusations.

    Both Jim and I were victims of another form of literary theft when George Dance refused to remove our poetry from his website and posted out of context quotes by us in his wiki.
    That's not plagiarism, though.
    What part of "another form" are you failing to comprehend?
    George Dance did, otoh, plagiarize "Batty's Hat" from PJR. And you know that, as well.

    No, it was a parody, satire of PJR.

    Fair use.
    Exactly, you nailed that onme, Doc...!
    Obvious, probably even to PJR himself.
    Obviously not, since PJR accused George Dance of having plagiarized it from him.
    I didn't say PJR would admit it, little monkey.
    Was George's "Penny's Hat" blog a satire as well, Donkey?

    I don't remember, we should ask George Dance, little monkey.

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  • From W.Dockery@21:1/5 to George J. Dance on Mon Nov 7 12:30:42 2022
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    Since my poems "Shambles" and "Karma Bombs" are on topic again, and this is a George Dance thread, here were George's thoughts on the "Shambles" poem.

    Interesting reading, in my opinion:

    ***

    George J. Dance wrote:

    Long Island poet Jim Senetto never ceases to amaze. On July 15, 2021 - mere hours after learning what a cento was - he had produced his first cento, entitled "Shambles," and had posted a copy to alt.arts.poetry.comments (usenet edition). Unfortunately,
    that first draft seems to have been withdrawn for further work, but Internet Archive has managed to save a copy for posterity:

    https://web.archive.org/web/20210721020302/https://groups.google.com/g/alt.arts.poetry.comments/c/ZeLu697_LfA/m/94BScwCKAAAJ?hl=en

    Also unfortunately, in that draft Cento Senetto did not name his sources, leaving it to those of us interested in centos to track them down. I have managed to find a candidate: a poem by Will Dockery, also entitled "Shambles," which Dockery published
    on his own "Shadowville Mythos" blog on July 5, 2021:

    https://shadowville-mythos.blogspot.com/2021/07/shambles.html

    The similarities between the poems extend to more than the titles. I hope the following line-by-line comparison of Senetto's cento (identified as "ER") and Dockery's poem ("WD") shows the extent of the 'borrowing':

    ER:
    1 Yes, that Richard Pryor looking guy
    2 was somewhat interesting, except that he was so drunk
    3 he drooled words
    WD:
    1 Yes, the "Richard Pryor" looking guy was somewhat interesting,
    2 except that he was so drunk he was drooling.

    ER:
    4 thinking I looked like Mark Twain or Gene Wilder,
    WD:
    3 He either thought I looked like Mark Twain or Gene Wilder,

    ER:
    5 as I watched it all go by on Broadway around midnight.
    WD:
    4 sitting on the bench on Broadway at Midnight, typing.

    ER:
    6 He mentioned Kentucky, was bourbon on the mind?
    WD:
    5 He seemed to think we were from the same home area,
    6 somewhere around Kentucky,

    ER:
    7 North oats, was sour mash on the mind? Carolina,
    8 where his family worked on crab boats,
    WD:
    7 Maybe Carolina,
    8 where his family worked on crab boats,
    9 or maybe North Oates Avenue.

    ER:
    9 then Tom Hanks was on my mind, though his dream
    10 was shrimp.
    [not in WD]

    ER:
    11 Politics reared its ugly head, drunk or sober it’s all the talk,
    11 the out of the side of his mouth political jabs and so on,

    ER:
    12 though quiet I was, being entertained, while playing the straight white guy,
    WD:
    12 were pretty entertaining,
    13 as I just sat there and typed,
    14 playing the white straight man type,
    15 like in Stir Crazy and Silver Streak,

    ER:
    13 thinking, possibly, my Einstein hairdo might just have been the candle
    14 to this drunken moth.
    WD:
    16 wild Einstein afro hair flapping in the breeze.

    ER:
    15 His stumble into me, brought it to a close,
    16 my coffee wetting the same sidewalk he wandered off on…
    WD:
    17 That went okay for a few minutes
    18 until Pryor knocked over my coffee,
    19 seemed to be embarrassed about that,
    20 and wandered away,
    21 on up the sidewalk.

    ER:
    17 and from the other end a hooker chick approached,
    18 she too, in shambles offering a down and dirty for five bucks
    WD:
    22 Then when a crack hooker chick
    23 in real shambles came along,
    24 offered to blow me right there for five bucks,

    ER:
    19 but saved, I was, a chilly breeze whispered, go home now.
    WD:
    25 I decided that along with the chilly breeze on my back,
    26 perhaps it was time to pack it up for the night.

    27 I wanted dark, I got dark.

    Credits:
    ER: a cento by Edward Rochester Esq.
    WD:
    -Will Dockery (11-15-2016)

    So, except for Jim's LL 9-10, every line appears to be taken from Dockery's "Shambles".

    Jim's poem contains some interesting rewrites of lines, but nothing that substantially changes the poem; it's still a narration relating the same story about the same incident and events. In my judgement, then, this first draft fails as a cento because
    it's not transformative enough. Evidently Cento Senetto felt the same, which could explain the draft's sudden disappearance.

    ***

    Again, well put, George.

    HTH and HAND.

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  • From W-Dockery@21:1/5 to George J. Dance on Mon Nov 14 06:30:30 2022
    XPost: alt.arts.poetry.comments

    George J. Dance wrote:

    On 2022-11-02 9:03 a.m., Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Wednesday, November 2, 2022 at 12:04:09 AM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
    Michael Pendragon wrote:

    On Tuesday, November 1, 2022 at 3:25:28 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>> On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 2:11:38 PM UTC-4, Michael Pendragon wrote:
    On Monday, October 31, 2022 at 12:59:44 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
    On Saturday, October 22, 2022 at 5:51:34 AM UTC, george....@yahoo.ca wrote:

    postpoetry


    although there's nothing left to say >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> we're gonna say it anyway
    & if a reader doesn't read >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> we'll call him something we don't need >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> & if a critic calls it shit >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> we won't believe a word of it >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> & if a poet points that out >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> we'll just ignore it & we'll shout >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> about her frogs and trees and birds >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> so we won't have to read her words >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
    or better yet let's write of war >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> and fill a page or two with gore >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> some reeking flesh a severed head >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> & maggots feasting on the dead >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> & if perchance that doesn't shock >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> let's add a line of fuck ass cock >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> motherfucker piss & shit
    (who knows that just might pass for wit) >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
    what else to do what else to say >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> when everything is mere cliche? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> how else to make a reader feel >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> or think that what we say is real? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> of course the whole idea is dumb >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> when we're as comfortably numb >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> but if we sweat through every motion >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> we may feel a real emotion – >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> at least it kills an hour or two >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> and we have nothing else to do. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
    ~~
    George J. Dance, 2007
    from Doggerel, and other doggerel, 2015 >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
    George Dance don't need no stinkin' commas. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> It isn't about what George Dance needs, "Professor"; it's about what the
    speaker of the poem needs.

    The speaker in your poem is not "a muse." >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> I never said he was. Where did you get the idea the speaker might be a
    muse?
    If poetry is meant to be read aloud, how does your lack of punctuation help your poem?
    Use the line and stanza breaks. That's what they're there for.
    You did not address the visual demand for six ampersands..
    It's just part of the style. "and" is replaced by &. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Does the speaker say "ampersand" in each line? >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> No, "Professor,", an ampersand is pronounced "and." I can understand you
    not knowing that, but it's something you could have Googled.
    Let me quote (from memory) from Karla, another wannabe online poetry
    teacher we once had here:

    "Do not confuse the speaker of the poem with the writer of the poem.."
    That saying has been used too much here. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Not enough, considering how many tend to forget it so often.
    The poem still represents your attempt at creativity. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Oh, good; you haven't started calling it "plagiarized" yet..
    Should she have?

    That would be a typical NancyGene troll stunt, yes. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
    I didn't ask if she would have (in your paranoid opinion), but *should* she have.

    George Dance is known (with or without justification) for >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

    That's just a smear from PJR, Pen, you know that..... >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Pendragon damned well knows it.
    That only accounts for one of the accusations.

    Both Jim and I were victims of another form of literary theft when George Dance refused to remove our poetry from his website and posted out of context quotes by us in his wiki.
    That's not plagiarism, though.
    What part of "another form" are you failing to comprehend? >>>>>>>>>>>> George Dance did, otoh, plagiarize "Batty's Hat" from PJR. And you know that, as well.

    No, it was a parody, satire of PJR.

    Fair use.
    Exactly, you nailed that onme, Doc...!
    Obvious, probably even to PJR himself.
    Obviously not, since PJR accused George Dance of having plagiarized it from him.
    I didn't say PJR would admit it, little monkey.
    Was George's "Penny's Hat" blog a satire as well, Donkey?
    I don't remember, we should ask George Dance, little monkey.

    If you like. I do remember reading PJR's accusation, and finding it disturbingly convincing.
    Your memory is not well known to be very trustworthy, Pen.

    I am known for having an exceptional memory, Stink.

    I could easily find and repost PJR's accusation, but I doubt that George Dance would be happy about it.

    I also doubt that George Dance appreciates how you and your Donkey insist on pressing the issue. As previously noted, I don't believe that George Dance intentionally set out to plagiarize PJR.

    However, that is precisely what he did


    No, that was a false accusation of PJ Ross's (and, now, yours). The
    alleged plagiaized poem that PJ Ross claimed I'd posted never existed.
    When that was not just pointed out but proven, he simply made up a story
    that I'd "deleted" it (not just from Google groups, but from all of
    usenet).


    , and raking it over the coals, yet another time, does nothing to improve his reputation.


    Actually, I think allowing bogus allegations like the above one go
    unanswered would be far worse for my reputation.


    Absolutely.

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