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  • New song: Windbags

    From Arthur T.@21:1/5 to All on Wed Jan 31 16:11:17 2024
    Title: Windbags
    ttto: Windmills by Alan Bell
    <https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4L1pwzKPZ-o> is missing the first
    word or two.

    In days gone by when the country was younger
    Rhetoric was how you'd change someone's mind
    Now they ignore all the issues that matter
    Now all they care is the foe gets maligned

    (Refrain:)
    They go on, and go on, they go on saying nothing
    Build themselves up as they tear others down
    Lies are beguiling; they spray them while smiling
    Grinding to dust any facts they disown

    In red states and blue and the purple, et cet'ra
    They tout the ideals that their foes denigrate
    Though they don't hold 'em, they claim they enfold 'em
    They'll say anything that the masses dictate

    (Refrain)

    Lies from the left, all promising freedom
    Lies from the right, all promising wealth
    Lies from third parties, all promising something
    Lies that show all, of our country's bad health

    (Refrain)

    (Last refrain:)
    And we let them go on, and we let them keep lying
    Elect them to posts that they do not deserve
    People who care just make folk songs decrying
    While liars and crooks say they're just there to serve

    My lyrics copyright 2024 by Arthur Tansky. License granted for
    non-commercial, non-political archiving and performance as long as:
    1. copyright notice is maintained, and
    2. no money changes hands.

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  • From Gary McGath@21:1/5 to Arthur T. on Thu Feb 1 10:42:21 2024
    On 1/31/24 4:11 PM, Arthur T. wrote:
    Title: Windbags
    ttto: Windmills by Alan Bell

    Right on target.

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  • From Paul Rubin@21:1/5 to Arthur T. on Thu Feb 1 19:40:54 2024
    Nice song. I've suggested a few tweaks, but some more seem possible.

    Arthur T. <arthur@munged.invalid> writes:
    Rhetoric was how you'd change someone's mind
    Persuasion was how you'd change someone's mind

    They go on, and go on, they go on saying nothing
    They go on, and go on, and go on saying nothing

    In red states and blue and the purple, et cet'ra
    In red states and blue states and purple, et cet'ra

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  • From Arthur T.@21:1/5 to Paul Rubin on Fri Feb 2 13:39:29 2024
    In Message-ID:<87eddvh6t5.fsf@nightsong.com>,
    Paul Rubin <no.email@nospam.invalid> wrote:

    Nice song. I've suggested a few tweaks, but some more seem possible.

    Arthur T. <arthur@munged.invalid> writes:
    Rhetoric was how you'd change someone's mind
    Persuasion was how you'd change someone's mind

    Much better. Thank you. I wasn't happy with "rhetoric" but couldn't
    come up with anything else.

    They go on, and go on, they go on saying nothing
    They go on, and go on, and go on saying nothing

    That was my original phrasing. But while the repetition worked for me
    in Windmills, it didn't quite seem right here. Of course, this being
    filk/folk, people will sing whatever they like.

    In red states and blue and the purple, et cet'ra
    In red states and blue states and purple, et cet'ra

    In my mind's ear, there's a slight pause after the word "blue". That
    works well when followed by "and", but less so when followed by
    "states".

    Thank you for your comments. I always appreciate suggested
    improvements. Since you said that more tweaks seem possible, I'm
    going to let a couple of days go by so I can look at it again with
    fresh(er) eyes.

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    Arthur T. - ar23hur "at" pobox "dot" com

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  • From Paul Rubin@21:1/5 to Arthur T. on Fri Feb 2 12:50:36 2024
    Arthur T. <arthur@munged.invalid> writes:
    They go on, and go on, they go on saying nothing
    They go on, and go on, and go on saying nothing
    That was my original phrasing. ...

    They go on and on, and go on saying nothing ?

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  • From Tim Merrigan@21:1/5 to no.email@nospam.invalid on Fri Feb 2 15:22:46 2024
    On Fri, 02 Feb 2024 12:50:36 -0800, Paul Rubin
    <no.email@nospam.invalid> wrote:

    Arthur T. <arthur@munged.invalid> writes:
    They go on, and go on, they go on saying nothing
    They go on, and go on, and go on saying nothing
    That was my original phrasing. ...

    They go on and on, and go on saying nothing ?

    Should there be a comma after the third "on", or maybe even an
    ellipsis.
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